Score: 6

"Low quality screamer"

submission: Dodraugen

date: November 3, 2009

I think that you need to study more screamers, before you make one that's going to actually cause a good scare. Adam Phillips did one, where it was a radio report of a spate of kidnappings, where people were literally taken from homes, businesses and the like. Then the creature burst through the window and took the guy listening to the radio. That's a brilliant piece of research for you. You can find that toon on Weebl's Stuff.

The drawing style could use a little work - I'm not too sure about the guy's face shape, as it looks like you've drawn a face on a balloon, for some reason. If he's sitting on the can, have him do something - trousers around his ankles, grunts of effort, that kind of thing. Perhaps a copy of a newspaper, which the creature could burst through, for the punchline.

Did the evil thing have to look like a radioactive sperm? Just an observation there. I'm not sure that drain pipes have that many twists and turns in them - people like to keep them as straight as possible, as it saves on maintenance.

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Score: 5

"Needs a "play all" feature"

submission: Yings Unfinished Business

date: November 3, 2009

Well, it's not a bad presentation, consisting of all of the pieces that you've done in the past, but when it's just introduction idents, you really need to give it a broader scope to work with.

I think that you could use a "play all" function, combined with some sort of start page before each animation, telling us the title.

Of all the pieces that you've created here, Commercialise This and Around the Galaxy are the best that you have made. With the way that those two show promise of actually progressing to complete works, you've certainly got a finished product to look forward to, if you can force yourself to stick at it and work a little harder in actually creating. I know that the path is a long, hard one, but it is incredibly rewarding at the end.

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Score: 5

"I've seen better"

submission: :The Dot Game:

date: November 1, 2009

But then again, I've seen a lot worse.

I think that this game is simple and not very well drawn, but you have engineered a good engine that can control such a game. Better drawing skills can be worked on over time and taking into consideration techniques, such as zooming in, using a slightly smaller drawing tool to make your levels, you will find it more rewarding, as the levels and designs you produce look more detailed and are part of bigger and better games.

I'd certainly suggest that you look at backgrounds, since that's where this piece falls down - a standard white background isn't very intriguing and offers nothing additional to plot line, or insight into the levels themselves. Perhaps you could couple that with some sound effects for the bounce of the ball and then for the deaths of the ball. Combined with a set number of lives in the engine and you've got the recipie for some massive strides forward with your game.

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Score: 8

"Great loop."

submission: Giga La Nora

date: 2 hours ago

What a lovely little forest-based loop this is. I like the way that this piece seems to give the impression of country life, particularly in some forest-based backwater, where life only moves at a crawl and the locals all know one another by name and have done for years.

I think that you've got a good combination of instruments here and while some of the backing instruments are a little on the quiet side, this makes little overall difference to the track itself.

I'd have perhaps considered having some other instruments here that would occur in the same setting, for example, a lute, or other stringed instrument, that would add so much veriation to the piece. It's a great loop, so perhaps you need to consider adding slightly more to the track in length, perhaps up to a minute, or so.

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Score: 7

"Great remix, change the vocals"

submission: Planet Caravan (Spacewarp Mix)

date: 2 hours ago

I think that this is a pretty good tune that really does express itself, with the way that you've made good the track itself. However, when it comes to your own vocals, you're no Ozzy Osbourne, so don't get giving up your day job :P

I think that they way that the track pans out, it's not a bad piece of music and I'd certainly like to see you take it further, with perhaps a change of the vocals and then perhaps even the tempo of the track being increased.

Not a bad track, but it's just not one of the best ones on the site.

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Score: 9

"Sounds good"

submission: Icewalkers ( Naked )

date: 2 hours ago

You got the bassline just right, but it seems that more could be done - the bassline itself seems a little bare and when you come along and add additional piano to it, it just feels to me like you didn't really add enough 'oomf' to the piano, when you added the up tempo part of the track in - there could have been an additional line of piano track that had the drive and excitement from the sensations of walking on the ice, experiencing the rush of cold air, the feelings of being so close to nature and the like.

It's a good piece, but still a work in progress, if I'm brutally honest with you.

Perhaps adding additional instruments would be the key here?

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