While I liked the music to start with, the way that it fell apart for me was the morning after scene, where he woke up next to Popeye. I'd have thought that he was at least infatuated with Inspector Clouseau and would have consummated that relationship first.

Perhaps this is the sort of thing that needs more plot initially to get it going - I know that they start off at a rave and as a result, you could have had the Panther snorting a line of coke, downing an E, or injecting with heroin. Judging by the after effects of the anorexia, perhaps heroin would have been the drug of choice.

Yes, we've seen the symbolism of pieces that have been used to make people realise what anorexia or bulimia does to you, so I can sympathise with that part, but you did go a little over the top when you went into the self harm phase. Most people would draw the line at cutting their own guts out.

Still, marks for trying and a great use of some interesting pieces of music.

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I love the way that you've woven this story around two seemingly new players in the game that has become Madness. I just had to go back and watch Madness Combat 5 and 6 in order to totally understand this piece from start to finish. I love the way that the time has come to start explaining things along the lines of 'how did this happen?', as I'm sure over the coming episodes, we'll see a much clearer picture of the way tha tthe madness infects us all.

I love the way that you've put the graphics in of things like the people dancing in the one building - it just shows them that there's the most awesome of callbacks to the humble beginnings of this series that has now spiralled out of control of the original intentions... or has it?!

The little details being paid attention to are what really makes me smile here - the two guys patching themselves up as they go through the building and even grabbing a bandanna for their troubles. What next, a dirty vest? :P The way the sky looks like the static on an old TV, combined with the blood red of a Nevada night that has been the backdrop for so long is really a nice touch that I think you're certainly making the most of.

I'm certainly looking forward to seeing where these two get to come back into the main Madness story line. Combat 10, or will we see another chapter of this sub-plot first?

Do these guys have names? Are they as catchy as Hank, Jesus and Clown? I can only wait and see, but I assure you, I really don't want to do that.

Is there any chance that you can make a DVD of all of these episodes together? It's getting to be quite a trial just to find them out amongst your collection of flash submissions. That and I think you deserve some hard earned cash for your efforts with this amazing and long-lived series.

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I think that this piece needs more work than your other work, but that's possibly because it's shorter and lacks any real subtlety.

I think that your delivery is basic, to say the least - there's little to no background and the flash itself totals little over 5 seconds long. Perhaps have the main character shaking, from the after effects of the caffeine in his system. Why not have him drop the last Red Bull can when the second guy comes along. Sound effects can be your ally here.

When he goes ape and punches the guy, perhaps put some sort of punch sound effect in, rather than having it done with the vocal talents which are limited by a bad mic. It will come with time, but getting a good plot in place is a good start, especially when you've got the ability to draw reasonably well.

For the drawing, I'd zoom in a little and use a slightly smaller tool, to give you a greater degree of control in your drawings. Taking more time to smooth out the drawings will give you a better looking piece at the end of the day and you'll get more credit if you do it right.

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A great piece - this has a nice blend of melody, beat, rhythm and of course those great vocals that you've found / borrowed / created. The use of the piano is spectacular, just giving the piece another dimension, where it needed it.

Makes me feel like I want to fly, to be perfectly honest. I can see that this is a track that is certainly going places. Perhaps you'd do me a favour and put the lyrics up on the comments next time, as these little things are always helpful to reviewers and listeners alike.

I'd have perhaps cranked up the tempo about halfway through, for the instrumental piece and then slowed down for the vocals once more. A subtle blend might just give you something else to work with, that people can use to take the track elsewhere in their minds.

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I'm not sure about classical crossovers - I've seen them butchered too many times before to be a massive fan of this sort of music, but this one seems to be one of the better ones.

I think where it falls down is that you start off with the piano - one of the most dominant instruments ever created, then you head to keyboards and from there, the piano is drowned out in a sea of artificial sounds, beats, rhythms and synths. What you need is something that the piano can shine through with, while not taking out the synths themselves. Let the piano come through and it will pay its way, giving you a much better sounding track.

The pace is good and the beat is powerful, so these are positive points for your piece. Slightly more work is required on the rest, but you've getting there.

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Hmm, it's not bad - there's a few components to this track that don't seem to bear much relevance to the rest of the piece, but other than that, it's a good sounding piece.

The introduction seems to get forgotten, as the second sound that you come along with (synths) doesn't sound anything like them, so kind of falls off the end, without anything to tie it in.

From then, the track seems to gather itself and some momentum, which you use to good effect, making a recovery. It could be a little longer - try something with that intro, then add something else to the end and you'll make some good progress.

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