Score: 5

"Jumps about a bit"

submission: De -TEST- icus 1

date: October 9, 2009

It's a shame, because the animation of the piece looks pretty good for a stop-motion piece, where the characters have very little personality, save for the main protagonist. Given that you've worked a good plot, I'd suggest that you work more on making it all the same size - jumping from one small frame to one that takes up the whole of the window is not a mistake I'd expect of someone as capable of animating as you are.

Perhaps this needs to be drawn in photoshop, or even flash, with a tablet, so that you can justify the comic book look - if you're going to do that, perhaps have them laid out like a comic book and then move from frame to frame, keeping the place looking like it's as if the viewer is reading the comic book, so to speak.

I think that you've got a good base for a successful series here and I'd like to see you take it further - judging by the fact that this piece is over 6 years old, the chances of seeing it taken further might have bneen dealt a blow, but never say die.

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Score: 8

"A little short"

submission: Don't cry anon

date: October 9, 2009

A nice, smooth animation that has a deep message. I can see that you've spent seven hours very well in making this piece :)

I think that the sound quality could do with being improved - is that someone singing the lyrics in the background, or if it was just me deceiving myself. If they were lyrics, then the sound quality needs improving, to compliment the video.

I can certainly look forward to seeing more stuff by you in the future - the drawing style is quite basic, but with time, it will almost certainly bloom into something much more, which will be also worth watching.

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Score: 6

"Needs more detail"

submission: The Morph!

date: October 9, 2009

I think that it's not really a morph - you're not moving the existing lines into new, more interesting shapes, you're taking lines out and putting new ones in.

I'd have suggested that you put more colours into the piece itself, giving a more impressive look to the finished product. Also, have you considered zooming in and using a finer pointer for drawing with - you have used quite a thick pointer, so that the look shows a sharper, more focussed approach.

The music was a good choice, but it might need more of a direction, as opposed to the random switching between images.

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Score: 10

"Love it!"

submission: Making A Piranha Plant

date: October 9, 2009

What a brilliant piece - this shows any would-be sculptors exactly what they need to do in order to create such a piece. From the sculpting, the baking (I thought the browns and blacks were how the teeth were actually going to be painted - it was only on the second run through that I noticed they were just burn marks from the baking :P) and finally through the painting and assembly

I love the way that you put the tin foil around the major parts to give texture - it really works well and produces a lovely effect that would be quite painstaking to create using a craft knife and other sculptor's tools.

I think that I would have liked to see little video snippets, showing people how you fashioned certain parts of the piece and then the way that it all came together - a much more personal feel to the piece and it's encouraging to otehr artists.

As I said in your news post, you need to submit pictures of this to the Art Portal, as it's legal, since this is a sculpture, so you can get away with it, so why not have a crack.

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Score: 2

"Piranha aren't tropical fish"

submission: 101 Things To Do Part.2

date: October 8, 2009

Seriously, you need to do some research in order to get your pieces looking better. Try sorting out things like the sound and animation (Get a better mic / recording software; zoom in and use a smaller drawing tool, take more time) when creating your animations.

With this piece, research is needed - the whale isn't to scale, piranha fish aren't tropical, they're freshwater fish, as they tend to live in places like the Amazon. What I'd say you really needed was a course on Google Video, so that you can find out exactly how a shark's jaw moves (down, not up - only part of the fish should move, not the whole top half of the fish, this is due to bone / joint structure.)

With time and effort, you can make something of this, but you're going to need to commit yourself, in order to get there - at present, it's lacking.

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Score: 2

"Awful"

submission: 101 things to do Part.1

date: October 8, 2009

Really poor sound quality, badly animated, full of mostly stupid advice. I'd like to leave it there, in all honesty, but let;s elaborate, for argument's sake :

The sound has quite an echo - I'd suggest that you get a better mic, or work on some better recording software, where you can equalise the recordings before you submit it to be animated.

The animation was poor - really bad stick drawings that look nothing like the last frame, so you end up with a really jumpy animation that doesn't give a smooth looking final piece at all. Try using a different drawing technique - zoom in and use a smaller tool to draw with, so that when you zoom out, it looks a lot better.

Telling people to quite their jobs and become full time authors during a recession. That's fucking brain dead. I'm not really bothered that you enjoyed making it, try enjoying spending more time on the piece and getting it right first time around.

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Score: 7

"Funny stuff"

submission: How Not To Make A Comic

date: October 8, 2009

A great piece of vocal material, but it could be enhanced by a couple of key additions - you've gone on about having a plot that all fits together, so I'd have expanded it to an angle behind the artist - show the spotty kid drawing this comic and then from there, you can cut to the comic book for when he'd drawing. You can cheat on the animation, by having it set as the computer screen, but just make a mouse pointer over the drawing, to show it's being drawn on the screen, for example.

When it comes to the punchline (see what I did there ;) ), why not set the screen, so that he minimises Flash or Photoshop and opens a google search for porn. That would seem like a better. If you're having him go from drawing board to computer screen, it would work just as well, but you need to get a sound for the chair rolling across the floor, just as one of the little details that make a piece complete.

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Score: 9

"A good laugh"

submission: Dan Hibiki vs Ryu

date: October 6, 2009

While it's not quite what I expected, I did get a good laugh out of this piece - was the winning move a result of Dan's complete incompetence in dispatching the move, or a cunning ruse for Ryu to try the move himself, putting him into orbit?

A good smooth animation style, with good pace and some neat little facts about the game Street Fighter. I seriously can't believe that this didn't make the Street Fighter Collab, because you deserved to be a part of it. Perhaps there will be other collabs in the future that you can join in with and make even better contributions for them.

How long did this take to make? It looks like it's been prepared quite quickly at first glance, but in the end, if you look closer, you see that there are some pretty neat additions, which would have taken quite a while to put in place. The background, with people milling about for example, was a great piece that even some of the better animators on Newgrounds don't even think about.

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Score: 9

"I say!"

submission: Bob n Sam Ep1 Stereotypes

date: October 5, 2009

A very funny episode, with some cruel (if you can't take a joke, that is) stereotyping and witty humour. I like the animation style, but it can go further - when Sam crawls through Bobby's jacket, it could have bulged more realistically, possibly denying the very laws of the time-space continuum itself, by storing things like a top hat inside one's friends.

I'd personally have said that the Anti Stereotype Police Department should only be the ASPD, since stereotype is only one word. Not to worry, you got through the episode alright with that little item and it was still funny.

A great joke to make Schwarzzenguile, who is probably the worse stereotype that I've ever seen. Keep up the good work and I hope to see more soon :)

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Score: 10

"See you on Monday :)"

submission: TaL: They Made Me Do It

date: October 4, 2009

Brilliant jokes all the way through that had me smiling with glee at Tywon's misfortune and just plain retardedness.

Another great instalment of the series, I think that this particular piece has a lot of the class of episode 3, but the editing is plain to see, with it being just a great addition to your portfolio here.

I'd have come up with some sort of edit for the theme, just to cut down on the time and fit into the five minute limit. Perhaps just got for it and have the start, with the town in sight, then the "TYWO AT LARGE" yelling, to really give people a shock intro.

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